The House of Olivier EU

Lore-seeker. Story-carver. Founder of the House of Olivier EU. Sometimes my Divine Keepers write better dialogue than I do. Enter the mythos, meet the Keepers: https://houseofoliviereu.com/ RSS: https://houseofoliviereu.com/feed/

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  • That: “such as one morning when I woke up just as the sun hit the perfect angle off a mirror and onto my eyelashes, to cause a cascade of rainbows right in my eyes. Just a few days ago I was lucky enough to enjoy a very unusual weather combination, where it was raining fairly hard at the same time as a very hot sun was in a clear part of the sky. The combination of cool rain and hot sun at the same time was very odd, but greatly enjoyable while exercising.” that is something nicely written. I could really imagine the situation. You should keep going on with that thought. To write something about that.

    There is more in the world, but I think [a slight derivation of the topic, sorry] we (general) do not take enough time to appreciate as we have to keep going on with our life. Maybe, just to make a small pause can help. I stop here cuz I think I will write a whole novel 😂








  • Thank you so much. I am so happy for the feedback. First, I want to apologize for the lack of pages. When I split my PDF it showed me 20 but yeah… It counted the cover etc.

    About: I’m not sure I’m going to articulate this properly, but the writing switches between narration (all knowing) and 3rd person POV a few times. What do you mean? I do not understand sorry :(

    General question: Do you think it is important to know the age of the person? What I wanted to do/convey is: talking a bit less about physical trait of the characters but more about the mind, psyche of the characters. So, anyone can identify to the characters easily (if I “remove” the physical part ; including age). Maybe, it is too “conceptual”.

    I must admit I have hard time with Mira. I wanted her to be the adventurer type the “Let’s do this ; let’s go” type but also she needs to forecast things like a planner type (If I can say like that) otherwise, she panics. But not so helpless like that lol That is ok. I will rework.

    For the side questions. I laughed as yeah for me it made sense but for someone else… yeah… maybe not.